tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5562283155833378792.post2455090315923533188..comments2023-09-07T00:45:57.162+10:00Comments on Riff: Reading the signsJuliehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09513648613788716017noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5562283155833378792.post-29595915108303075542010-10-11T16:20:35.061+11:002010-10-11T16:20:35.061+11:00This is definitely one of your more accessible pie...This is definitely one of your more accessible pieces. I love the look into the classroom too. It really makes you think about the differences between classroom experiences as you travel from place to place. Great writing!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5562283155833378792.post-57448373786710031892010-10-11T08:28:34.526+11:002010-10-11T08:28:34.526+11:00Good ending, Julie. You don't specifically say...Good ending, Julie. You don't specifically say, but I got the impression that the teacher is relatively new. What I took from was the new teacher's initial tendency to judge and even fear her students, and the moment when the teacher realizes that you can't make snap judgments based only on appearance.PattiKenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02894925987580502697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5562283155833378792.post-43614894541184045422010-10-10T21:41:43.310+11:002010-10-10T21:41:43.310+11:00i totally get your style--it's a lot like mine...i totally get your style--it's a lot like mine, but you're a much better writer. Your poetic/prose...meandering. But you get to the point and then it all makes sense. Well, most of it. Check out Erin, at The Tiny Leaf sometime. She makes it look easy.Tomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10948978798395906663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5562283155833378792.post-25403543162015017542010-10-10T10:40:06.426+11:002010-10-10T10:40:06.426+11:00nice. i was a bit confused at first myself as to w...nice. i was a bit confused at first myself as to what the student was doing...i do like the unveil at the end and perhaps the dawning of understanding for the teacher...and hopefully the begining of a relationship between teacher and student.<br /><br />you use interesting words. i imagine some of it is geographical/cultural difference. i find it intriguing.<br /><br />xBrian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5562283155833378792.post-12271305795018171492010-10-09T21:59:20.582+11:002010-10-09T21:59:20.582+11:00Jeff: a growing respect ... not fear of SL just ab...Jeff: a growing respect ... not fear of SL just absolute ignorance ...Juliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09513648613788716017noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5562283155833378792.post-60817850269643225982010-10-09T20:00:39.575+11:002010-10-09T20:00:39.575+11:00Yes, I am back - well my poor body is ...
I foun...Yes, I am back - well my poor body is ... <br /><br />I found that I could not write at length in my usual style - well, I could, but readers would be hard-pressed to tolerate it. It borders on the poetic. Here, I try to simulate the slice taken by a lens. Click. Click. Click.<br /><br />I loaded up an image per day to write about whilst away, and managed not a one.<br /><br />I knew the problem with what the boy was doing as I had rewritten following the advice of my travel companion. Was not aware that the narrator was confusing, too.<br /><br />Tricky stuff this writing. What is so very obvious to me, is not obvious to others.Juliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09513648613788716017noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5562283155833378792.post-27963011693434468332010-10-09T19:52:00.135+11:002010-10-09T19:52:00.135+11:00Are you back? This story is more accessible, stro...Are you back? This story is more accessible, strong and I like it. Where readers may be having difficulty -- at the beginning is it is not clear you are the teacher rather than a student. Also the highjinks the boy is up to is not altogether clear. <br /><br />However is some way in being more accessible you lose some of the rich tapestry your writing usually has. Perhaps too far the other way.Joan Elizabethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16358008925558240778noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5562283155833378792.post-61807185882834884952010-10-09T19:09:46.309+11:002010-10-09T19:09:46.309+11:00Fear of sign language? Or a growing respect for Ro...Fear of sign language? Or a growing respect for Robbie?<br /><br />Like the unique interpretation, but I think I'm missing something. Will reread.JeffScapehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00190641629175438603noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5562283155833378792.post-36982964568325467652010-10-09T18:14:20.637+11:002010-10-09T18:14:20.637+11:00By 'wordy' do you mean too long? Last tim...By 'wordy' do you mean too long? Last time I received the feedback that my writing was too dense and inaccessible. So I have tried to alter my sentence style to pare the language back and back and back.Juliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09513648613788716017noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5562283155833378792.post-26347908019760755922010-10-09T16:28:41.569+11:002010-10-09T16:28:41.569+11:00Nice interpretation of the theme Julie. A little &...Nice interpretation of the theme Julie. A little 'wordy' for my taste but then I admit to being last cab off the rank here and rushing a little to catch up so apologies. Time's running out and I haven't posted yet. Definitely the better entry from you. Cheers :)Bainohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14156193098088048637noreply@blogger.com