Monday, April 19, 2010

109. Stake-out


Slouched in the driver’s seat of his nondescript ’92 Swift, Harry kept an eye on the suspects, a smirk of disbelief flickering across his sallow face. Gingerly, he pressed the heel of his palm to his distended belly. That Chicko Roll for breakfast was playing merry hell with his internals. He wound the rear windows down an inch to relieve the stench, reaching into the glove-box for another antacid.

There was a doubt niggling him that was hard to shift, an aside from the client to his legman, Davey. Now, Davey was not the sharpest tool in the shed, and subtlety was foreign to him, so he often blew things out of all proportion. Harry harboured a suspicion that they were being set up. He cast his mind back to that initial interview, trying to free-associate with this likely looking bunch.

That was it. Why hadn’t he twigged before this!

6 comments:

Grandma said...

I truly enjoyed this one. Different than your usual approach, but very well done. Just glad that you didn't put this one in poetic form. :-)

Ji said...

beautiful post!

Julie said...

Hah ... no no ... would not attempt this in verse! What I wanted to experiment with was the crime genre ... will read some more and have another go in a little while. Quite interesting trying to broaden my appreciation of other genres. None of them are simple.

diane said...

"playing merry hell with his internals" had me sniggering.

Clytie said...

Love this one! When pairing it with the picture, I had to giggle.

Joan Elizabeth said...

Couldn't get past the state of his internals or the sight of the unlikely three on the bench. A fun read. Working your way through the genres ... looks like there are more fun reads ahead.